October Girl

Wow, this was good. I loved it. So discriptive and true. My gosh I feel this way alot. I loved how you let it out on paper. I love this ...

Welcome to YWS, well first of all I agree with each and every person that has critiqued this .... Poem. Like some have said don't post more than one a ...

Oh, my gosh! Why is it when someone writes about blood or death it automatically becomes emo?! I'm so sick of it! The poem was great, it had alot of ...

Dear, if there's one thing about poetry you don't force it. It doesn't come from the mind it comes from heart and soul. What you feel, there's times when you ...

Wow M.B.! I really like this poem... but I can't help but feel that you forced some of the rhyme I liked the last stanza alot! Maybe you could expand ...

Wow, this was sad.... But overall very good. Maybe you could make it longer? I don't know just a suggestion. Maybe you could make it a little more interesting was ...

I liked this a little bit. But a little too much gore... you think you could tone it down a little? I mean it was awesome over all. But I ...

Jess, I think you could make this longer, more detailed. Obviously the charaters outside but where? Where is the dripping coming from? What is it, rain, snow? I really wan ...

I like how it flowed, how you described how the character felt. I know you could make this longer and I think it would be better if you did. :D ...

I liked it because, you showed emotion, what you wanted to feel. What you didn't feel. What the character is going through. I mean I'm not an expert, but then ...

You asked me to review your work if you'd review mine, like I said about mine you will be scared for life. Anyways I think this was great, but! Claud ...

WHAT?!!!!!!! You're just going to leave me hanging?!!!!! What are you freaking waiting for?!!! Write man, write!!!!!!!! There has to be more..... c'mon hurry up! I'm not going to wait ...

Hey Timea, I want the other part hopefully there is one, Timea I got lost on where they were. I got lost, one moment they outside? the next their inside ...

Timea.... I love the story but got kinda lost I didn't know exactly where they were. Anyways I wanted to also say I loved it you better PM me when ...

Hey YOU! I think you did a good job, at first I was kinda spacing out, but it was me because I was listening to music full blast I might ...